Poetry Bus again
(I chose this image from the ones that Swiss offered as inspiration for this week’s Poetry Bus. My initial reaction to it was that it resembled a woman’s womb and ovaries, but with a somewhat ghostly quality, or like a wisp of smoke, so that was my starting point.)
Whispers
down the hall I hear distant echos
the footfalls of children who never were
whispers of existence so faint
the ticking of my watch would drown them out.
My smile reaches out to stroke
the downy skin of babies unborn
the scent of them drifts past just out of reach
a sigh scatters their essence into the ether.
I cannot see their faces
obscured as they are by another history
though my belly longs for each of them.
I inhale and absorb the thought
the idea of what they might have been.
Rachel Fox said,
April 2, 2010 at 7:40 pm
A ghost poem! Effective too.
Are you the first one out to play this week? I think you might be.
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Evalinn said,
April 5, 2010 at 11:12 am
Great poem, thank you for sharing!
Poetikat said,
April 5, 2010 at 3:51 pm
You’ve evoked ‘The Turn of the Screw” for me here. Very nicely done.
Argent said,
April 5, 2010 at 8:35 pm
Beatiful and wistful. True poetry.
swiss said,
April 6, 2010 at 7:32 am
that ticking watch is rather lovely
Pure Fiction said,
April 6, 2010 at 10:11 am
Very haunting, cfm. And beautifully simple too.
TotalFeckinEEjit said,
April 6, 2010 at 1:04 pm
Sad and haunting and beautiful and stark and simple and this line- ….. ‘ whispers of existence so faint the ticking of my watch would drown them out.’….WOW!
Pete said,
April 6, 2010 at 3:55 pm
The belly line is the giveaway. I found this poem beautifully ethereal but very very sad.
Titus said,
April 6, 2010 at 9:06 pm
I echo TFE’s highlighted line – astonishing writing.
And as haunting as the best ghost stories, but sadder.
I saw the womb and ovaries in the picture too, but actually went with what it was.